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    First Person... with Omniscient? Yay or Nay?

    I've fixed it. The section has a reference to a spy camera, found by the police towards the end -- so with some tweaks, it's through the PoV of one of the main characters watching the proceedings through the camera. Bingo.
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    Telling not Showing? In time-travel novel.

    Not really... Although that could change depending on what editors/agents/publishers say.
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    First Person... with Omniscient? Yay or Nay?

    Many thanks. I'll carry on and think on it. Diolch/Thanks.
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    Telling not Showing? In time-travel novel.

    sorry to be obtuse, what's the Crit Partner Match?
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    First Person... with Omniscient? Yay or Nay?

    My latest book has three POVs in it. The main antagonists (a married couple) and a South London dodgy dealer. But I noticed one kick-ass section in Ch1 that is omniscient. Is that a total no-no? Or if clearly separated, is it ok? But even if okay is it ill-advised? Genuine feedback is...
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    Sweetheart Pitchfest FAQ - Please read if you are pitching

    Thank you for putting it on. It would be great to have more agents & editors involved, but you can only work with what's available. Good luck everyone.
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    Telling not Showing? In time-travel novel.

    It's designed to be the first in a series. The time travel is planned, the protagonists and antagonists have the means to time travel, I put in a date and location tab at the start of each section. By putting in hints I'm trying to reveal the time travel aspect rather than have one of them...
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    Telling not Showing? In time-travel novel.

    I don't know if it's acceptable to pop the text of the chapter on here? It's only 1300 words. Anyhoo, I dropped in hints such as 'noobs' and the WW2 reference which I thought were subtle yet thought-provoking. The issue is, should I be more "in your face" so the reader knows this is time travel...
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    Telling not Showing? In time-travel novel.

    I tweaked my first chapter after superb advice from a small publisher. I'm excited about my book (again) and looking forward to the next pitch event. I posted the chapter on a review site and had some great feedback. One reader suggested I make it more obvious in chapter one that the characters...
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    Successful Pitch Examples

    So as mine is MG DF TT FA, should I pitch to pub pros that are very similar? Or look for exact matches? Obviously I'm not going to look at pitching to Adult Romance, YA High Fantasy, etc. But as my MG FA [etc] is very dark and gritty should I risk sending it to a YA FA? I'd say it is very...
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    Successful Pitch Examples

    Pardon my ignorance, but two of the lines suggested for stating what your book is, are as follows: Currently Looking for Tags: YA Fantasy Genre: Middle Grade Urban Fantasy Now, if the book in question is a MG Urban Fantasy, what is the "currently looking for tags" bit all about? Is it to say...
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    Hi from Wales

    Hello everyone, I'm new to this forum, so be gentle. :) I've written my first book - it's a gritty MG. More of a teen book really - I'd say between MG and YA, but hey ho. It's 88K words long, and I've used hashtags #DF, #FA #TT #MH The title is LORD RHYS AND THE DEVIL DOG. There's plenty of...